Graduation Research Presentation

Feb 19, 2016 18:39
Today, the graduation research poster presentation of senior students was held.

Since I have supported some studies of some students, I was also a little bit nervous.

However, they all had done well, so I was relieved.

There were also various interesting studies, the day rolled by quickly.

I was encouraged to do my study more diligently from today.
卒業研究発表

今日は、4年生の卒業研究発表が行われました。

サポートしてきた後輩たちの発表だったので、私も少し緊張しました。

しかし皆うまくやってくれて、とても良かったです。

他にも面白い研究が幾つかあり、あっという間に一日が過ぎました。

私も来年度から、ますます研究を頑張ろうという気持ちになりました。
No. 1　Aiumi's correction
  • Today, the graduation research poster presentation of senior students was held.
  • Today, the seniors' graduation research poster presentations of senior students were held. // The seniors presented their graduation research posters today.
    　Just put seniors' in front.
    It sounds like they all had different presentations, so use the plural 'presentations' and 'were'.
    It is more natural to just use 'present' as a verb, like this:
    "The seniors presented their graduation research posters today."
  • Since I have supported some studies of some students, I was also a little bit nervous.
  • Since I supported some of their studies, I was also a little bit nervous.
    　You don't have to say "students", because you just mentioned the seniors in the last sentence. You can just use the pronoun "their" to refer to them
  • However, they all had done well, so I was relieved.
  • However, they all did well, so I was relieved.
  • There were also various interesting studies, the day rolled by quickly.
  • There were also several interesting studies, so the day rolled by quickly. // Some of the studies were also quite interesting, so the day rolled by quickly.
    　"several" or "some" is better than "various" here, because various means "different from one another", and you already provided an adjective (interesting).
  • I was encouraged to do my study more diligently from today.
  • I was encouraged to do my study more diligently starting today.
    　"study" can be used as a verb, so you don't need "do"
Toru
Thank you very much for the corrections and the kind explanations! :)
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